rampant speech bubbles

GAH! my first comic, and so many things go wrong? blueh.
alright, i've updated the pic. (if anyone noticed, the last one had a comically rampant speech bubble) corrected all the mistakes too.
if theres one thing i hate about JPEG picture format, its the picture quality. the more i squeeze the size of the pic down the worse it gets =(

i did this in paint shop btw, i'm switching to photoshop for the next one.

Comic 2 "Birthday"
Script 100%
Sketch. 100%
Inking 0%
Colour, shading 0%